- Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
- Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
- Explanation of ideas
- Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Bully by Lee Hirsch portrays the story of how bullying can influence or ruin the life of a child, and those around them. In the documentary Hirsch follows five different children through an entire school year as the face family, personal and communital troubles that can be relatable to any audience. The film shows throughout that bullying is on a much larger scale now than ever before and that it can lead anyone to do things they never thought possible.
- Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
- Bully, by Lee Hirsch, correctly illustrates how bullying can affect a child, because bullying can change a child’s self esteem and eventually their self concept.
- Claim 1: Bullying can change the way a child thinks about oneself.
- Set up: If bullying is not discouraged by everyone, it can ruin a child’s life by affecting their self identity.
- Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” (I’m starting to think I don’t feel anything anymore)Alex Libby
- Explanation of quotation to prove claim: Alex is a child who has been bullied to the point where he doesn’t even notice the bullying as an issue because he has become calloused to it.
- Counterclaim 1: However, .... However, bullying would not be such an issue for children if they learned to stand up for themselves and if other people discouraged it.
- Set-up: In many schools in the film, the staff and officials do not make a reasonable effort to prevent bullying. They tell the bullied child to make friends with the bully or to just deal with it. In some cases, they completely deny the fact that any bullying is occurring.
- Evidence: Lead-in When one student at East Middle School in Sioux City, Iowa was urged to shake the hand of one of bullies by the school’s assistant principal, Kim Lockwood. She told the student, “So by not shaking his hand, you’re just like him” (Lockwood).
- Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: By completely disregarding the bullied child’s issue, this lead to his situation being ignored, leaving him with only the aegis of his confidence, which had been knocked down by his teacher.
- Claim 2:
- Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” ( )
- Explanation of quotation to prove claim
- Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
- Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” ( )
- Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
- What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
- Concluding sentence: restate main idea Bully transcends the line between film and for most of us, reality. As Hirsch masterfully proves how degrading and horrific the effects of bullying on children really are. In his brilliant art of storytelling he depicts not only the improbable, but the seemingly impossible.
1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....bullying is a controlled problem that has an easy solution.
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose...
2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
It can be understood why someone might interpret bullying in this way... because many people have not experienced bullying first hand so they would not understand the severity of this problem and it’s global grasp on children.
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]
3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However... bullying can only be stopped if it is discouraged by everyone. It is not a simple problem that can be solved by only one person, everyone must lend a hand in stopping it.
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer...