Friday, February 5, 2016

Benjamin Franklin Quote S/R REDO

Ben Franklin describes how liberty is more important than temporary safety.
Franklin claimed that those who give up their essential liberties to gain a little safety do not deserve to have either. A college student in Texas named Andrea Hernandez was expelled for refusing to wear a locator tag while on campus. Hernandez explained her skepticism. In an interview with InfoWars, Hernandez said that, "I feel it's the implementation of the Mark of the Beast*. It's also an invasion of my privacy and my other rights.". Hernandez claimed that the locator tag infringed on her personal rights. The locator tag represented a bigger issue that she did not want to support. She did not want to support the idea of a force controlling where people are and knowing where they are. However, safety may seem more appealing over liberty in some situations. For example, the terrorist attacks on September 11th, 2001 shocked people into wanting safety over everything. Scott Shane discussed the state of the minds of the American people in an article in the The New York Times. He explained how, “Shocked to watch nearly 3,000 die in a single, sprawling plot, many people were prepared to give up a little privacy and liberty so long as the counterterrorism bureaucracy promised them protection from a ruthless enemy.”. Many people were so panicked that they were completely willing to kowtow to the United States government in order to achieve a placebo of safety. At first glance, safety may seem like a top priority. It cannot be denied that safety is important. Safety is an important thing to many people, it is what improves the quality of life for most people. However, Thomas Jefferson once so wisely said, “I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery.”. It is always more important to be free than safe. In conclusion, essential liberty is more important than safety because it is better to be in a situation of peril and freedom than a situation of safety and thralldom.

Wednesday, February 3, 2016

S/R Benjamin Franklin Post

Ben Franklin describes how liberty is more important than temporary safety.
Franklin claimed that those who give up their essential liberties to gain a little safety do not deserve to have either. A college student in Texas named Andrea Hernandez was expelled for refusing to wear a locator tag while on campus. Hernandez explained her skepticism. In an interview with InfoWars, Hernandez said that, "I feel it's the implementation of the Mark of the Beast*. It's also an invasion of my privacy and my other rights.". Hernandez claimed that the locator tag infringed on her personal rights. The locator tag represented a bigger issue that she did not want to support. She did not want to support the idea of a force controlling where people are and knowing where they are.

Sunday, October 4, 2015

Othello Act 5 S/R Lewis

In Act V of Othello, William Shakespeare painfully illustrates how Iago was able to ruin the lives of almost every main character in the story. Iago killed Roderigo and Emilia himself, as well as Desdemona and Othello indirectly. After a planned scuffle between Roderigo and Cassio, Iago killed Roderigo, feigning a fight between them. Othello strangled Desdemona in her bed, fully believing that if he didn’t,  she would have continued to betray other men. Emilia found out about Desdemona’s death, and then accused Othello and Iago of being murderers. Iago killed Emilia, and Othello killed himself after learning that Desdemona was actually completely innocent. The villainous Iago was then taken away to be tortured and killed. William Shakespeare leaves an image of sadness in the reader’s mind at the end of Act V in Othello.

Othello, by William Shakespeare, correctly depicts how Iago was able to manipulate and ruin the lives of many characters. Iago’s ability to manipulate people led to the death of almost everybody. After a brief fight that was engineered by Iago between Cassio and Roderigo, Iago killed Roderigo. Roderigo describes the hopelessly villainous nature of Iago with his final words. He utters the words, “O damned Iago! O inhuman dog!” (5.1.73.). Roderigo almost expresses sympathy for Iago and those who are manipulated by him. In trying so hard to get what he wanted, Iago ended the lives of everyone important to him. Iago’s efforts almost seem hopeless. In the end of Shakespeare’s tragic tale, the reader finds that all of Iago’s efforts were useless.

However, Iago at times may have seemed

Thursday, September 24, 2015

Colin L., Zach W. Othello Act 2 S/R REDO

Summary Response Outline
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Summary:
  • Topic sentence: In Othello, William Shakespeare vividly displays how Iago is truly the essence of jealousy and betrayal.  
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas: Iago so badly wants the lieutenancy held by Michael Cassio that he will stop at nothing to obtain it.
  • He will lie and manipulate many people, including Cassio himself. All just to accomplish his own goals
  • Concluding sentence: William Shakespeare’s Othello revolves around Iago’s evil qualities and the fact that he is a manipulative fiend who is willing ruin anyone’s life in order to get what he wants.

Response:

  • Topic sentence: In William Shakespeare’s tale, Othello, Shakespeare illustrates how Iago is only interested in his own pursuits, not the welfare of others because he uses people to get what he desires.
  • Claim 1:  Iago is a two-faced demon who manipulates people to help him pursue his own agenda by appearing to want to assist other people.
    • Set-up- Iago learns that Cassio does not respond well to alcohol. He then persuades Cassio to drink wine, knowing Cassio will be easily angered in his drunken state.
    • Evidence: After Cassio starts a inebriated brawl that night, Iago speaks to him, “Confess yourself freely to her. Importune her help to help you in your place again”(Shakespeare 2.3.337-339).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: Iago tells Cassio to plead to Desdemona to be returned to his position. If Desdemona advocates for Cassio, Iago will create the illusion of Desdemona and Cassio being lovers to Othello. He will make Othello suspicious of why Desdemona is pleading for Cassio to be returned to the position of lieutenant. This will make Othello lost his trust for Desdemona and will make Othello very angry with Cassio.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, some may argue that Iago is actually being helpful.
  • Set-up- Iago gives Cassio advice on how to re-attain his lost lieutenancy. Cassio believes he is being honestly helpful.
    • Evidence: At the conclusion of Iago and Cassio’s conversation about re-attaining Cassio’s lost position, Cassio says to Iago,  “Good night, honest Iago”(Shakespeare, 2.3.355).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: Iago is truly being honest with Cassio. He wants Cassio to spend more time with Desdemona. He isn’t just doing it for his own agenda.
  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?: At first glance, one might think that Iago is honestly trying to be helpful towards others. This position seems reasonable because Iago constantly offers his help to others. But it's more complicated than that, Iago only wears the mask of a person with good intentions in order to reach his own goals. He appears to want to help, but in essence he only manipulates people. Iago has the ability to pit people against each other by lying to them.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea:   Iago is a manipulative fiend who is willing to do anything to anybody in order to get what he wants.

Sunday, September 20, 2015

Lewis/Wiegert S/R Act 2 Othello

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: Iago portrays the essence of jealousy and manipulation.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas: He so badly wants the lieutenancy held by Michael Cassio that he will stop at nothing to obtain it.
  • He will lie and manipulate many people, including Cassio himself. All just to accomplish his own goals
  • Concluding sentence: Iago’s display of these evil qualities proves that he is a manipulative fiend who is willing ruin anyone’s life in order to get what he wants.


Response:

  • Topic sentence: Iago is only interested in his own pursuits, not the welfare of others.
  • Claim 1:  Iago is a two-faced demon who manipulates people to help him pursue his own agenda by appearing to want to assist other people.
    • Set-up- Iago learns that Cassio does not respond well to alcohol. He then persuades Cassio to drink wine, knowing Cassio will be easily angered in his drunken state.
    • Evidence: After Cassio starts a inebriated brawl that night, Iago speaks to him, “Confess yourself freely to her. Importune her help to help you in your place again”(Shakespeare 2.3.337-339).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: Iago tells Cassio to plead to Desdemona to be returned to his position. If Desdemona advocates for Cassio, Iago will create the illusion of Desdemona and Cassio being lovers to Othello. He will make Othello suspicious of why Desdemona is pleading for Cassio to be returned to the position of lieutenant. This will make Othello lost his trust for Desdemona and will make Othello very angry with Cassio.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, some may argue that Iago really is being helpful.
  • Set-up- Iago does give Cassio advice on how to re-attain his lost lieutenancy. Cassio believes he is being honestly helpful.
    • Evidence: At the conclusion of Iago and Cassio’s conversation, Cassio says,  “Good night, honest Iago”(Shakespeare, 2.3.355).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: Iago really is being honest. He does want Cassio to spend more time with Desdemona. He isn’t just doing it for his own agenda.
  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?: At first glance, one might think that Iago is honestly trying to be helpful towards others. This position seems reasonable because Iago constantly offers his help to others. But it's more complicated than that, Iago only wears the mask of a person with good intentions in order to reach his own goals. He appears to want to help, but in essence he only manipulates people. Iago has the ability to pit people against each other by lying to them.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea:   Iago is a manipulative fiend who is willing to do anything to anybody in order to get what he wants.

Monday, September 14, 2015

Othello Act 1 S/R

Summary Response Outline

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea Othello, by William Shakespeare, illustrates how jealousy and prejudice motivate people throughout it’s telling.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas Many of Shakespeare’s characters in Othello are motivated by their jealousy or enmity of others. This covetousness and detestation leads to betrayal amongst people who should be allies.
  • Explanation of ideas Shakespeare continually displays what jealousy and hatred can make a person do. Some are prejudiced towards the protagonist, Othello, because he is black. Others hate Othello for the decisions he’s made or because they envy him for who he loves.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea  A common theme in Othello is how jealousy and prejudice can control one’s motivation and strike a wedge between people, making them do terrible things.
  • No opinions
  • No I, you, me, my, our, we, us, your
  • concise
  • attribute idea to author
  • no plot summary
  • in your own words
  • only in third person
  • Supporting ideas, no quotes

Response:
  • make an argument: In act one of Othello by William Shakespeare Iago plans the downfall of Othello by using his allies against him.
  • take a position: (correctly/incorrectly portrayed)In this first act Shakespeare brilliantly depicts the acts of jealousy and betrayal through Iago, one of Othello’s most trusted military advisors. Who turns others against Othello because he did not receive a promotion that went to another one of Othello’s men.
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
  • Claim 1: Iago hates Othello and will stop at nothing to make him miserable
  • Iago commits to these acts of betrayal in the first scene of act one when he says “I am not what I am.”(Shakespeare 1.1.71  ) By stating this to Roderigo, one of Iago’s pawns, he alerts the reader that there is more to his personality than meets the eye.
  • For while Iago discusses how to turn Othello’s wife Desdemona to Roderigo, he states “I hate the Moor.” (Shakespeare 1.3.429  ) Iago says this out of pure jealousy for Michael Cassio whom has taken the position of lieutenant that Iago believes should be his.
    • Counterclaim 1: However, Iago show signs of comradery with Othello as he stills obeys orders as a soldier should, in addition he dissuades Roderigo from killing himself.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation”  “If thou dost (drown thyself) I shall never love thee after. Why, thou silly gentleman!”(Shakespeare 1.3.348-349)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim:By using his words to save the life of a sorrowful Roderigo  Iago shows his caring side. He wants revenge and will do anything to get it, but he does not want the blood of an innocent man on his hands. Iago proves that he does have a conscience buried deep within him, and that he is not completely ruled by his hatred of Othello.

  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Use rebuttal progression
    • A common view in Othello is that Iago is  not all evil, but he is. Even when it seems as if he is empathetic, Iago only acts that way to progress his plan of vengeance. This behavior is not reflective of his true purpose throughout the story.It cannot be denied that this claim has backing though, Iago certainly seems like a sane indivdual with a grasp on his situation but he is not. It may appear like Iago is kind and compassionate when he only is concerned for his own well being. Therefore on the surface Iago seems like all the other characters in the story but is more like a complex puzzle with no edges and five extra pieces.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
  • In conclusion a brief way of explaining Act 1 would be Iago stakes his claim as an evil genius and Othello is betrayed by those he trusts.

Thursday, September 10, 2015

Bully S/R Response REDO

Summary Response Outline
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Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
  • Explanation of ideas
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Bully by Lee Hirsch portrays the story of how bullying can influence or ruin the life of a child, and those around them. In the documentary Hirsch follows five different children through an entire school year as the face family, personal and communal troubles that can be relatable to any audience. The film shows throughout that bullying is on a much larger scale now than ever before and that it can lead anyone to do things they never thought possible.

Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
  • Bully, by Lee Hirsch, correctly illustrates how bullying can affect a child, because bullying can change a child’s self esteem and eventually their self concept.
  • Bully, by Lee Hirsch, correctly illustrates how anyone can overcome bullying if they stand up for themselves and if other people are willing to help, because bullying is a societal problem that can only be stopped if it is discouraged by everyone.
  • Claim 1: Bullying can change the way a child thinks about oneself and many people stand by and let it happen.
    • Set up: If bullying is not discouraged by everyone, it can ruin a child’s life by affecting their self identity.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” A severely bullied kid named Alex Libby even said, “I’m starting to think I don’t feel anything anymore” (Hirsch).    
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim:  Alex is a child who has been bullied to the point where he doesn’t even notice the bullying as an issue because he has become calloused to it.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, .... However, bullying would not be such an issue for children if they learned to stand up for themselves and if other people discouraged it.
    • Set-up: In many schools in the film, the staff and officials do not make a reasonable effort to prevent bullying. They tell the bullied child to make friends with the bully or to just deal with it. In some cases, they completely deny the fact that any bullying is occurring.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  One student at East Middle School in Sioux City, Iowa was urged to shake the hand of one of bullies by the school’s assistant principal, Kim Lockwood. Lockwood told the student, “So by not shaking his hand, you’re just like him” (Hirsch).   
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: By completely disregarding the bullied child’s issue, this lead to his situation being ignored, leaving him with only the aegis of his confidence, which had been knocked down by his teacher. This is a perfect example of being a bystander to bullying and allowing this problem become worse.
    • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
    • Many think that....bullying is a controlled problem that has an  easy solution. It can be understood why someone might interpret bullying in this way... because many people have not experienced bullying first hand so they would not understand the severity of this problem and it’s global grasp on children. However... bullying can only be stopped if it is discouraged by everyone. It is not a simple problem that can be solved by only one person, everyone must lend a hand in stopping it.
Concluding sentence: restate main idea Bully transcends the line between film and for most of us, reality. As Hirsch masterfully proves how degrading and horrific the effects of bullying on children really are. In his brilliant art of storytelling he depicts not only the improbable, but the seemingly impossible.